I enjoyed the overall story of the Prologue. It was a little wordy in places, but the overall story was enjoyable. One question, If the Scav jumped on his back and bit his chain mail, how can he drive his elbow into the Scav's face?
"He raised the blade to strike again, but one of the Scavs leapt on his back, with a strength that defied its small frame, and Caius felt the sharp sting of its teeth piercing through his chainmail.
Caius grunted in pain and drove his elbow into the Scav's face,"
Thanks the feedback, Tricia! You make a great point! It's little things like this is often miss! Ned should probably just hit in the face or perhaps something else entirely. I'll add it to my list of edits for the final draft!
I enjoyed the overall story of the Prologue. It was a little wordy in places, but the overall story was enjoyable. One question, If the Scav jumped on his back and bit his chain mail, how can he drive his elbow into the Scav's face?
"He raised the blade to strike again, but one of the Scavs leapt on his back, with a strength that defied its small frame, and Caius felt the sharp sting of its teeth piercing through his chainmail.
Caius grunted in pain and drove his elbow into the Scav's face,"
Thanks the feedback, Tricia! You make a great point! It's little things like this is often miss! Ned should probably just hit in the face or perhaps something else entirely. I'll add it to my list of edits for the final draft!